Decluttering speech and writing

A radio announcer, reporting the first Atlantic hurricane of the season, concluded with this statement: “Hurricane Danny currently does not pose any threat to land.” If I were proofreading this sentence I would change it to “Hurricane Danny poses no threat to land.” The verb phrase “dose not pose any” can be rewritten as “poses no,” making the phrase short and succinct but retaining its meaning. In many cases a verb phrase containing “not” can be rewritten using one word, the resulting phrase conveying its meaning clearly and concisely and allowing the reader to proceed to the next idea. As for “currently,” it serves no purpose. It means “at this time,” and the present-tense verb tells the reader something is happening now without “currently” cluttering and despoiling the literal landscape.

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